Hi looking for a buggy for my 19 mth old. Liked the larger Maclaren Techno XLR (quite new I think - in Coffee and Pink combo) as it seemed really roomy and comfy - but when I went to the shop and tried it in my boot it wouldn%26#039;t fit in my VW Polo boot! Now we%26#039;re looking at the Quest model which seems to be 5 cm shorter when folded. Really like the new Lulu Guinness floral one. Anybody own a Maclaren Quest? Any info/advice? It%26#039;ll be for occasional light use as we go most places in the car and she does like to walk also. We do need it to recline for sleeping in case we go for a whole day out, but also need it to have a nice upright position most of the time. Thanks.
Maclaren Quest Buggy - Any info?
hi i had a quest for my daughter its a really good buggy good seat positions the only fault is if u do lots of walking like i do the wheels wear down very quickly
Reply:hi i have the quest and i really like it! its comfy enough too! th above person said about the wheels wearing down and this is true! it is lightweight but i find it a bit heavier when folded! but is nice for the children and nice to push!
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Sunday, April 12, 2009
Girls ,I'm a fem guy and like to hang out with the girls at work,is that ok to be like one of the girls?
i.m the only guy at work in a office and enjoy girl talk and love what the girls wear to work everday.we have fun talking about clothes ,makeup ,and hair and one of the girls wants to take me shopping and get me to dress like one of the girls at work from head to toe,i think i would enjoy doing that ,but i,m a little shy.my boss is a woman and see it find with her and wear what i want to work .the girls said you will find out what it like to be in a dress ,heels ,hose ,makeup all day and see what we girls go thru.I think it be fun to find a really pretty dress in a floral design of chiffon and some really cute heels and suntan hose and lingerie and get my makeup done by one of the girls at work and my nails,the girls at work said i might enjoy dressing like that and come to work everday that way.
Girls ,I%26#039;m a fem guy and like to hang out with the girls at work,is that ok to be like one of the girls?
Yeah, I%26#039;m gonna have to call bs on this one.
But if you%26#039;re serious...yeah, I guess it%26#039;s fine, as long as you%26#039;re happy and not alienating your co-workers.
Reply:Yes, I think you should do that, Maybe get your self a whole new wardrobe while your there....I bet you would look nice in Pink....
Reply:As long as they don%26#039;t mind..have fun. I know girls who would love to have a shoppong partner like you!
Reply:Sure it is!! Just be yourself. :-) Follow your instincts and all that, hun.
Reply:HEY, i think that is really cool, take advise from a girl... there is nothing wrong with dressing like a girl, it will make you look hot. I love to shop so that trip to the mall will be fun!!
Reply:I don%26#039;t see why it WOULDN%26#039;T be okay. I mean, it%26#039;s your life and your clothes, if it%26#039;s something you%26#039;re interested in trying, go for it! I wish more guys talked about girl things with me. Most are homophobic and act as if even acting slightly feminine will make them seem homosexual. You rock! Go for it!
Reply:Hey there....if your boss is OK with it and you want to...then why not....It could be fun for you to explore new avenues in life.....there is nothing wrong with being you...and if it is something that is going to make you happy then go for it!!!!!
Also I want to say.....I am as straight as they come.....but it is people like you that make me comfortable....I have many gay and lez. friends and family and there is one thing that commend you on and that is being open to people about who you are....you be what ever makes you happy....it%26#039;s the people who hide it right in front of your face and think that you are stupid......when really you would respect them more if they were just honest....I know that sometimes it is hard to come out and I am not talking about the people who are just starting to figure that out because it is a hard thing to do....but I love the honesty that you just gave here to us all......You are awesome.....YOU DO what really makes you happy!!!! And HAVE FUN DOING IT......LOL...:)
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Girls ,I%26#039;m a fem guy and like to hang out with the girls at work,is that ok to be like one of the girls?
Yeah, I%26#039;m gonna have to call bs on this one.
But if you%26#039;re serious...yeah, I guess it%26#039;s fine, as long as you%26#039;re happy and not alienating your co-workers.
Reply:Yes, I think you should do that, Maybe get your self a whole new wardrobe while your there....I bet you would look nice in Pink....
Reply:As long as they don%26#039;t mind..have fun. I know girls who would love to have a shoppong partner like you!
Reply:Sure it is!! Just be yourself. :-) Follow your instincts and all that, hun.
Reply:HEY, i think that is really cool, take advise from a girl... there is nothing wrong with dressing like a girl, it will make you look hot. I love to shop so that trip to the mall will be fun!!
Reply:I don%26#039;t see why it WOULDN%26#039;T be okay. I mean, it%26#039;s your life and your clothes, if it%26#039;s something you%26#039;re interested in trying, go for it! I wish more guys talked about girl things with me. Most are homophobic and act as if even acting slightly feminine will make them seem homosexual. You rock! Go for it!
Reply:Hey there....if your boss is OK with it and you want to...then why not....It could be fun for you to explore new avenues in life.....there is nothing wrong with being you...and if it is something that is going to make you happy then go for it!!!!!
Also I want to say.....I am as straight as they come.....but it is people like you that make me comfortable....I have many gay and lez. friends and family and there is one thing that commend you on and that is being open to people about who you are....you be what ever makes you happy....it%26#039;s the people who hide it right in front of your face and think that you are stupid......when really you would respect them more if they were just honest....I know that sometimes it is hard to come out and I am not talking about the people who are just starting to figure that out because it is a hard thing to do....but I love the honesty that you just gave here to us all......You are awesome.....YOU DO what really makes you happy!!!! And HAVE FUN DOING IT......LOL...:)
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Anyone Know Where I Can Find Something That Looks A Little Like These (PIC)?
Okay i was out shopping today and i saw a girl with a gorgeous pair of lacoste shoes on they where just like these ones
http://www.zappos.com/n/multi_view.cgi?p...
BUT all around the shoes was a silver pattern which looked to me as though it was a silver floral pattern i dont really know that much alls i know was there was a silver pattern around them, anyone seen these or know where i can get hold of some i REALLY want some
Thanks for all your answers :)
Anyone Know Where I Can Find Something That Looks A Little Like These (PIC)?
the link doesn%26#039;t work
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http://www.zappos.com/n/multi_view.cgi?p...
BUT all around the shoes was a silver pattern which looked to me as though it was a silver floral pattern i dont really know that much alls i know was there was a silver pattern around them, anyone seen these or know where i can get hold of some i REALLY want some
Thanks for all your answers :)
Anyone Know Where I Can Find Something That Looks A Little Like These (PIC)?
the link doesn%26#039;t work
super nanny
How can I improve my essay?
How can I improve this? Dwellings
The home is the place where people live, store items, and find shelter. It is also where our domestic affections are centered, where the householder’s personality is reflected in a contained space. Home is where outside matters can leave us to focus on we care about most. Scott Fitzgerald%26#039;s book, The Great Gatsby, contains a fictional story by about the decline of the American dream. The characters, Jay Gatsby, Nick Caraway, the Buchanan’s, and the Wilsons all keep homes that reflect their unique characters. Since many key events are chronicled in the homes of the persons, each dwelling is crucial to understanding the setting, story and disposition of the each person in the novel.
The book is set in New York. The majority of the homes are placed on West Egg, %26quot;a slender riotous island which extends itself due east of New York%26quot;. The origin of its name comes from the placement of two egg-shaped islands outside of New York that are parallel to each other on east and west ends. West egg is home to those who have recently come into great wealth, because of this they spend their money frivolously, engage in loose conduct, and have few worries in life. Gatsby and Nick live here. Yet, Nick is the only one who describes it as the “least fashionable of the two”, because of the garish taste of its residents. East egg is where Tom and Daisy Buchanan live. Nick Caraway describes the homes there as “… white palaces of fashionable East egg...”
Nick Caraway, the narrator of the story, lives in West Egg, (at the very tip), in between two much more expensive homes. As a young man (he turns thirty during the course of the novel) from Minnesota, Nick travels to New York in 1922 to learn the bond business. On his right was Gatsby’s home, of which he had a partial view of his lawn. But Gatsby wasn’t the only one richer than him, he was surrounded by millionaires. His home was nothing in comparison to their large mansions. He had ‘a weather beaten bungalow’ that cost eighty dollars a month. Like Nick, the house is small, aging, overlooked, modest, and quiet. His neighbor Mr. Gatsby had weekly parties that lasted till the next morning. But Nick’s house was only visited a few times by Gatsby and had one occasion when he had his cousin and Gatsby over for tea. As his home had been overlooked so had he, but his quiet reflective attitude also made him the perfect candidate for a narrator. Everyone he meets seems to tell him information he did not ask for or did not even want to know.
Whereas Nick is modest, his neighbor, Jay Gatsby, is the complete opposite. Mr. Gatsby owns a home that is “a colossal affair by any standard.” Nick describes it as being an imitation of Hotel de Ville in Normandy. Hotel de Ville is French for, “city hall”, so one could imagine how massive the building was. Gatsby’s house had a brand new tower on one side, under a thin bed of ivy, a marble swimming pool, and more than forty acres of greenery. The whole front of the house is positioned to catch the light. Yet it only took him three years to make the money to buy it. It was filled with, “period bed rooms swathed in silk and floral arrangements, dressing rooms, pool rooms and bathrooms with sunken baths.” Gatsby’s bedroom had a bath with a study area and cupboard in the wall. His own residence was actually quite modest, as the most expensive items were a grooming set on his dresser, which was plated in dull gold. Gatsby’s personal room reveals a lot about his character. His room is simple, yet he keeps a monstrous mansion filled with people. He throws parties, yet doesn’t mingle with the guests. He has a great deal of wealth yet very few know where it really comes from. This shows how he is putting on a sort of façade to impress someone though he only needs little. Nick noted that his “…personality is an unbroken series of gestures.” Nick soon finds out that Gatsby has acquired everything to impress Daisy who did not marry him previously because he was not rich. But rather than move on Jay has tried to recreate the past, which is not possible.
In East egg, Daisy, along with her husband Tom, and their child, lives in a cheerful red-and-white Georgian Colonial mansion overlooking the bay. Their lawn starts at the beach and ends at the front door. The greenery wrapped around the sides of the building. In front was a line of French windows, coated in a reflective gold. There is an assortment of expensive furniture within their home but not much else is explained about the Buchanan’s home in detail. Like their home they are consumed with wealth but have little regard for others. Both husband and wife have affairs. Daisy has a new relationship with Gatsby, and Tom has had many affairs and was recently with his mechanics wife.
Between New York and West Egg lies a desolate land. Nick describes this location as, “a place where ash grows like wheat.” This point is the residence of George and Myrtle Wilson. They live in George’s shop, where he serves gas to Tom whenever they go out to the city. Their home is not even described in detail because of its insignificance. The whole area is described as being made of ash. The only distinctive object is a billboard for an oculist, which has a pair of eyes with large spectacles that seems to watch the valley, which may be a metaphor for God. Obviously this is the flux of poor people left from the figurative burning of money buy the rich. And this reflects its owner perfectly. George is a simple man, but he is overly submissive, and lacks the colorful character that the others possess. His wife, Myrtle, longs to escape this grey land and looks forward to each meeting with her affair, Tom.
Throughout the book the great Gatsby homes play a crucial role in telling the story. The author mentions in fragments details about each dwelling which is placed each time at the proper moment of present action, for maximum effectiveness. The homes kept by the persons involved reinforce the established personalities of the characters. Gatsby is eventually assassinated in his marble pool, by Myrtles husband after Daisy runs over her in Gatsby’s car. The façade created Mr. Gatsby is shown to be superficial when no one comes his funeral, but his home revealed this previously by the number of people who are there as moochers, leeching off Gatsby’s wealth but not proving to be true friends. The Buchanan’s retreat back into their carefree lifestyle and Nick returns to the Midwest where he is more accustomed.
How can I improve my essay?
I feel that your essay was very well thought out and provided evidence, but may be considered too simplistic. I think the only thing you could do to make your essay stronger is to change your wording up a bit. Make it much more complex. Trying using an online thesaurus to make smaller words seem more effective. I tried to help you get what I am saying but changing your first paragraph up a bit. Here it goes:
A home may defined as a place where people reside, hoard their possessions, and find refuge. It is also where most domestic affections are centered and the householder’s personality is reflected in a confined space. Home is where outside matters can force us to focus on we care about most. F. Scott Fitzgerald%26#039;s novel The Great Gatsby contains a fictional story revolving around the decline of the American dream. Most of the novel’s essential characters, including Jay Gatsby, Nick Caraway, the Buchanans, and the Wilsons, all keep homes that reflect their individual unique characters. Because many of the novel’s significant events are chronicled in the homes of these characters, each dwelling is crucial to understanding the setting, story, and disposition of the each person in the novel.
I hope I didn%26#039;t give you the impression that you are a bad writer or that I am better. I was just trying to give an honest opinion.
Reply:omg we are reading this exact boook. the great gatsby. it sounds fine to me. but its really long
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The home is the place where people live, store items, and find shelter. It is also where our domestic affections are centered, where the householder’s personality is reflected in a contained space. Home is where outside matters can leave us to focus on we care about most. Scott Fitzgerald%26#039;s book, The Great Gatsby, contains a fictional story by about the decline of the American dream. The characters, Jay Gatsby, Nick Caraway, the Buchanan’s, and the Wilsons all keep homes that reflect their unique characters. Since many key events are chronicled in the homes of the persons, each dwelling is crucial to understanding the setting, story and disposition of the each person in the novel.
The book is set in New York. The majority of the homes are placed on West Egg, %26quot;a slender riotous island which extends itself due east of New York%26quot;. The origin of its name comes from the placement of two egg-shaped islands outside of New York that are parallel to each other on east and west ends. West egg is home to those who have recently come into great wealth, because of this they spend their money frivolously, engage in loose conduct, and have few worries in life. Gatsby and Nick live here. Yet, Nick is the only one who describes it as the “least fashionable of the two”, because of the garish taste of its residents. East egg is where Tom and Daisy Buchanan live. Nick Caraway describes the homes there as “… white palaces of fashionable East egg...”
Nick Caraway, the narrator of the story, lives in West Egg, (at the very tip), in between two much more expensive homes. As a young man (he turns thirty during the course of the novel) from Minnesota, Nick travels to New York in 1922 to learn the bond business. On his right was Gatsby’s home, of which he had a partial view of his lawn. But Gatsby wasn’t the only one richer than him, he was surrounded by millionaires. His home was nothing in comparison to their large mansions. He had ‘a weather beaten bungalow’ that cost eighty dollars a month. Like Nick, the house is small, aging, overlooked, modest, and quiet. His neighbor Mr. Gatsby had weekly parties that lasted till the next morning. But Nick’s house was only visited a few times by Gatsby and had one occasion when he had his cousin and Gatsby over for tea. As his home had been overlooked so had he, but his quiet reflective attitude also made him the perfect candidate for a narrator. Everyone he meets seems to tell him information he did not ask for or did not even want to know.
Whereas Nick is modest, his neighbor, Jay Gatsby, is the complete opposite. Mr. Gatsby owns a home that is “a colossal affair by any standard.” Nick describes it as being an imitation of Hotel de Ville in Normandy. Hotel de Ville is French for, “city hall”, so one could imagine how massive the building was. Gatsby’s house had a brand new tower on one side, under a thin bed of ivy, a marble swimming pool, and more than forty acres of greenery. The whole front of the house is positioned to catch the light. Yet it only took him three years to make the money to buy it. It was filled with, “period bed rooms swathed in silk and floral arrangements, dressing rooms, pool rooms and bathrooms with sunken baths.” Gatsby’s bedroom had a bath with a study area and cupboard in the wall. His own residence was actually quite modest, as the most expensive items were a grooming set on his dresser, which was plated in dull gold. Gatsby’s personal room reveals a lot about his character. His room is simple, yet he keeps a monstrous mansion filled with people. He throws parties, yet doesn’t mingle with the guests. He has a great deal of wealth yet very few know where it really comes from. This shows how he is putting on a sort of façade to impress someone though he only needs little. Nick noted that his “…personality is an unbroken series of gestures.” Nick soon finds out that Gatsby has acquired everything to impress Daisy who did not marry him previously because he was not rich. But rather than move on Jay has tried to recreate the past, which is not possible.
In East egg, Daisy, along with her husband Tom, and their child, lives in a cheerful red-and-white Georgian Colonial mansion overlooking the bay. Their lawn starts at the beach and ends at the front door. The greenery wrapped around the sides of the building. In front was a line of French windows, coated in a reflective gold. There is an assortment of expensive furniture within their home but not much else is explained about the Buchanan’s home in detail. Like their home they are consumed with wealth but have little regard for others. Both husband and wife have affairs. Daisy has a new relationship with Gatsby, and Tom has had many affairs and was recently with his mechanics wife.
Between New York and West Egg lies a desolate land. Nick describes this location as, “a place where ash grows like wheat.” This point is the residence of George and Myrtle Wilson. They live in George’s shop, where he serves gas to Tom whenever they go out to the city. Their home is not even described in detail because of its insignificance. The whole area is described as being made of ash. The only distinctive object is a billboard for an oculist, which has a pair of eyes with large spectacles that seems to watch the valley, which may be a metaphor for God. Obviously this is the flux of poor people left from the figurative burning of money buy the rich. And this reflects its owner perfectly. George is a simple man, but he is overly submissive, and lacks the colorful character that the others possess. His wife, Myrtle, longs to escape this grey land and looks forward to each meeting with her affair, Tom.
Throughout the book the great Gatsby homes play a crucial role in telling the story. The author mentions in fragments details about each dwelling which is placed each time at the proper moment of present action, for maximum effectiveness. The homes kept by the persons involved reinforce the established personalities of the characters. Gatsby is eventually assassinated in his marble pool, by Myrtles husband after Daisy runs over her in Gatsby’s car. The façade created Mr. Gatsby is shown to be superficial when no one comes his funeral, but his home revealed this previously by the number of people who are there as moochers, leeching off Gatsby’s wealth but not proving to be true friends. The Buchanan’s retreat back into their carefree lifestyle and Nick returns to the Midwest where he is more accustomed.
How can I improve my essay?
I feel that your essay was very well thought out and provided evidence, but may be considered too simplistic. I think the only thing you could do to make your essay stronger is to change your wording up a bit. Make it much more complex. Trying using an online thesaurus to make smaller words seem more effective. I tried to help you get what I am saying but changing your first paragraph up a bit. Here it goes:
A home may defined as a place where people reside, hoard their possessions, and find refuge. It is also where most domestic affections are centered and the householder’s personality is reflected in a confined space. Home is where outside matters can force us to focus on we care about most. F. Scott Fitzgerald%26#039;s novel The Great Gatsby contains a fictional story revolving around the decline of the American dream. Most of the novel’s essential characters, including Jay Gatsby, Nick Caraway, the Buchanans, and the Wilsons, all keep homes that reflect their individual unique characters. Because many of the novel’s significant events are chronicled in the homes of these characters, each dwelling is crucial to understanding the setting, story, and disposition of the each person in the novel.
I hope I didn%26#039;t give you the impression that you are a bad writer or that I am better. I was just trying to give an honest opinion.
Reply:omg we are reading this exact boook. the great gatsby. it sounds fine to me. but its really long
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Vintage vixens .. I need your help?
I recently picked up the cutest little peplum dress but I%26#039;m a little unsure about a few things. Before I start asking questions, here%26#039;s some info: It%26#039;s white with a purple/pink/turquoise floral print, short sleeved %26amp; comes with a matching belt.
1. Does the skirt part have to be fitted or can it be loose?
2. How long should the skirt length be?
3. How on earth do you work the belt? It%26#039;s one of those without the metal bit that goes into the holes, so it tends to loosen itself! I want it tight, for that wasp-waist look.
4. Too dressy to wear out shopping?
What do you guys think? Please let me know.
Vintage vixens .. I need your help?
The good thing about peplum dresses is: you can wear it however you want. I prefer skirts fitted in general, and I would just cut off the belt and get a different one, but other than that, do it however you prefer.
And NOTHING is too dressy to wear out shopping.
Reply:Wait %26#039;til Halloween and flaunt it baby, flaunt it!
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1. Does the skirt part have to be fitted or can it be loose?
2. How long should the skirt length be?
3. How on earth do you work the belt? It%26#039;s one of those without the metal bit that goes into the holes, so it tends to loosen itself! I want it tight, for that wasp-waist look.
4. Too dressy to wear out shopping?
What do you guys think? Please let me know.
Vintage vixens .. I need your help?
The good thing about peplum dresses is: you can wear it however you want. I prefer skirts fitted in general, and I would just cut off the belt and get a different one, but other than that, do it however you prefer.
And NOTHING is too dressy to wear out shopping.
Reply:Wait %26#039;til Halloween and flaunt it baby, flaunt it!
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What do you think of this dress? Need a cute dress for my fiance's law school event..?
http://www.oldnavy.com/browse/product.do...
In the black floral
Or, if you have other ideas, feel free to share :) I%26#039;m open to options and have some time to shop.
What do you think of this dress? Need a cute dress for my fiance%26#039;s law school event..?
I like it. It%26#039;s simple but elegant.
Reply:It looks really cute, but I%26#039;d get a little black jacket to cover your arms.
Reply:i like the dress...
macys also has cute dresses for all different occasions.
Reply:Honestly girl, no one else is going to tell you the truth, but I will...it%26#039;s a little boring. How about a dark navy blue halter style dress with some silver heels. The dark blue makes it classy, the halter makes it a little sexy and the silver makes it unexpected.
Reply:i like this dress:
http://store.alloy.com/item.do?categoryI...
i like yours too ! its so cute . and maybe with some cute flats you would be so adorable !
Reply:Yes that is very nice with a hint of sexiness. You did not mention what kind of event, but that dress should fit into about any event.
Reply:I like the dress for a wedding or something like that but for a law school event, it is too casual and not conservative enough. Perhaps if you wore a little white sweater over it, it would be perfect.
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In the black floral
Or, if you have other ideas, feel free to share :) I%26#039;m open to options and have some time to shop.
What do you think of this dress? Need a cute dress for my fiance%26#039;s law school event..?
I like it. It%26#039;s simple but elegant.
Reply:It looks really cute, but I%26#039;d get a little black jacket to cover your arms.
Reply:i like the dress...
macys also has cute dresses for all different occasions.
Reply:Honestly girl, no one else is going to tell you the truth, but I will...it%26#039;s a little boring. How about a dark navy blue halter style dress with some silver heels. The dark blue makes it classy, the halter makes it a little sexy and the silver makes it unexpected.
Reply:i like this dress:
http://store.alloy.com/item.do?categoryI...
i like yours too ! its so cute . and maybe with some cute flats you would be so adorable !
Reply:Yes that is very nice with a hint of sexiness. You did not mention what kind of event, but that dress should fit into about any event.
Reply:I like the dress for a wedding or something like that but for a law school event, it is too casual and not conservative enough. Perhaps if you wore a little white sweater over it, it would be perfect.
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What do you think?
This is just a little of the novel I%26#039;m writing. What do you think?
Mordecai%26#039;s Magic Shop was chili that morning. The two round portholes that let the dawn rays were fogged and webbed with frost. The maroon walls were alive with purple light from the paper lanterns that dangled from the ceiling. Each quivered with a private flame. The violet light glanced off the different items of the store. Green wine bottles filled with remedies, crystal goblets, turquoise amulets, silver challises of holy water, tin mugs of herbs.
In the furthermost corner of the room, behind a bend lay a small tiny kitchen. A pot bellied stove murdered to itself. It had four burners, each holding a skillet, a kettle, a pot, and a griddle.
Three hooked strings hung from above the great stove, each holding a porcelain teacup, each with a different floral desighn. The room glowed with the tropical scent of mango and chamomile that resonated from the kettle.
In a large emerald arm chair next to the stove, an extre
What do you think?
Be careful J.K. No one is ever thrilled with a successful author%26#039;s 2d creation. It%26#039;s too much Harry again.
Reply:Even though I didnt read it all and my English is limited. I think that%26#039;s a good novel...what I have learn in HS and College makes me think you are doing a good job...Good luck with your novel and I hope you share it with us someday
I will be helpful for me :D
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Reply:I really liked it, good job.
Reply:it definately sounds like harry potter and while it was interesting, it didn%26#039;t hold my attention very well.
Reply:I think that the shop was probably chilly, not chili, which is either a small pepper or a stewy soup.
Reply:I for one am NOT a fan of fantasy, magical novels.
I don%26#039;t read fantasy books, so I can%26#039;t really lecture you about the structure that they normally contain. Even so I feel obligated to tell you that I would never read this. You described the circumstances (the scenes what ever you want to call it) with an overwhelming amount of detail.
I don%26#039;t care that there is a tiny kitchen some where with a skillet, and a kettle and or even a pot, I care about the story.
Your first paragraph completely threw me and made me want to vomit up hidden boredom, I didn%26#039;t know existed.
Just remember to write the story, not circumstances that don%26#039;t matter in the long run.
Gag.
I know for a fact that you can do a lot better then what you have writen here. You have a great talent, but it seems (to me) that you have no idea how to create a presentable outline, for even a single paragraph.
Try again.
That%26#039;s the best way to succeed.
Reply:Don%26#039;t drag it out to much at the beginning, but it was good and I would like to here more of it. You did really goo with describing everything, it was like I was there. Read mine and tell me if it is good.......
Chapter 1: About Me!
Alright, first things first. My name is Mallory Davis and my first year of high school is starting in 3 days, 7hours, 11 minutes, and 23 seconds. I can’t really decide if I am excited or not. Should I be? Let me tell you some things about myself. As I said before, my name is Mallory Davis. I just turned 14 a couple weeks ago.
I have two sisters, Charlotte, who is 17 and entering her senior year. We call her Charlie. She is having an argument downstairs with my mom. She is mad that mom couldn’t have had me a year earlier or maybe a year later, so then we wouldn’t have to be in the same school together. She says I am an embarrassment to nature. (Still, not sure where she heard that one.) My younger sister%26#039;s name is Bella, not short for anything, just Bella. She is just now starting Kindergarten this year and she still sucks her thumb. My mom has been trying for the last month to convince her to stop. She even tried telling her that the other kids would laugh at her. But Bella’s response was that if anyone did that than she would punch him or her in the face. But, all together she is a pretty sweet sister. Just kidding, she is a terror and I swear she is a little boy trapped in a little girl’s body.
My parents are Herman and Marla. My mom works at a hair salon and does nails and my dad works at the hospital. He knows nothing about health, he just does something on computers. None of my family really knows what he does. Yeah I know, I am the only normal one in this family. Well, except for my hamster Bubbles. He is a sweetheart and I love him dearly.
What else can I tell you? I am about 5ft 6in with shoulder length dark brown hair and I am really tan. I love sports. I run cross-country and track. I also play basketball. I get good grades but not in the boy department. I have never had a boyfriend, and no I am not ugly! Well at least I don’t think I am! Boys just scare me sometimes. I have a best friend named Jolie who lives only a couple miles from my house.
“MALLORY, I TOLD YOU TO WATCH BELLA! SHE JUST TORE A HOLE IN MY NEW SOFA!,”
Uh-oh, that’s my mom, oh and another thing I forgot to mention is that I forget things easily. Got to run. Oh, and before I go, if you thought things would go somewhat smoothly this year, you couldn’t be more wrong.
I am 14 and that is the first story I have started. I know it probably needs some work and you are a good author, so could you give me some hints and help me out?? just post it with your question.
Will you try to do it as quick as you can?
Thanks!!!!!
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Mordecai%26#039;s Magic Shop was chili that morning. The two round portholes that let the dawn rays were fogged and webbed with frost. The maroon walls were alive with purple light from the paper lanterns that dangled from the ceiling. Each quivered with a private flame. The violet light glanced off the different items of the store. Green wine bottles filled with remedies, crystal goblets, turquoise amulets, silver challises of holy water, tin mugs of herbs.
In the furthermost corner of the room, behind a bend lay a small tiny kitchen. A pot bellied stove murdered to itself. It had four burners, each holding a skillet, a kettle, a pot, and a griddle.
Three hooked strings hung from above the great stove, each holding a porcelain teacup, each with a different floral desighn. The room glowed with the tropical scent of mango and chamomile that resonated from the kettle.
In a large emerald arm chair next to the stove, an extre
What do you think?
Be careful J.K. No one is ever thrilled with a successful author%26#039;s 2d creation. It%26#039;s too much Harry again.
Reply:Even though I didnt read it all and my English is limited. I think that%26#039;s a good novel...what I have learn in HS and College makes me think you are doing a good job...Good luck with your novel and I hope you share it with us someday
I will be helpful for me :D
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Reply:I really liked it, good job.
Reply:it definately sounds like harry potter and while it was interesting, it didn%26#039;t hold my attention very well.
Reply:I think that the shop was probably chilly, not chili, which is either a small pepper or a stewy soup.
Reply:I for one am NOT a fan of fantasy, magical novels.
I don%26#039;t read fantasy books, so I can%26#039;t really lecture you about the structure that they normally contain. Even so I feel obligated to tell you that I would never read this. You described the circumstances (the scenes what ever you want to call it) with an overwhelming amount of detail.
I don%26#039;t care that there is a tiny kitchen some where with a skillet, and a kettle and or even a pot, I care about the story.
Your first paragraph completely threw me and made me want to vomit up hidden boredom, I didn%26#039;t know existed.
Just remember to write the story, not circumstances that don%26#039;t matter in the long run.
Gag.
I know for a fact that you can do a lot better then what you have writen here. You have a great talent, but it seems (to me) that you have no idea how to create a presentable outline, for even a single paragraph.
Try again.
That%26#039;s the best way to succeed.
Reply:Don%26#039;t drag it out to much at the beginning, but it was good and I would like to here more of it. You did really goo with describing everything, it was like I was there. Read mine and tell me if it is good.......
Chapter 1: About Me!
Alright, first things first. My name is Mallory Davis and my first year of high school is starting in 3 days, 7hours, 11 minutes, and 23 seconds. I can’t really decide if I am excited or not. Should I be? Let me tell you some things about myself. As I said before, my name is Mallory Davis. I just turned 14 a couple weeks ago.
I have two sisters, Charlotte, who is 17 and entering her senior year. We call her Charlie. She is having an argument downstairs with my mom. She is mad that mom couldn’t have had me a year earlier or maybe a year later, so then we wouldn’t have to be in the same school together. She says I am an embarrassment to nature. (Still, not sure where she heard that one.) My younger sister%26#039;s name is Bella, not short for anything, just Bella. She is just now starting Kindergarten this year and she still sucks her thumb. My mom has been trying for the last month to convince her to stop. She even tried telling her that the other kids would laugh at her. But Bella’s response was that if anyone did that than she would punch him or her in the face. But, all together she is a pretty sweet sister. Just kidding, she is a terror and I swear she is a little boy trapped in a little girl’s body.
My parents are Herman and Marla. My mom works at a hair salon and does nails and my dad works at the hospital. He knows nothing about health, he just does something on computers. None of my family really knows what he does. Yeah I know, I am the only normal one in this family. Well, except for my hamster Bubbles. He is a sweetheart and I love him dearly.
What else can I tell you? I am about 5ft 6in with shoulder length dark brown hair and I am really tan. I love sports. I run cross-country and track. I also play basketball. I get good grades but not in the boy department. I have never had a boyfriend, and no I am not ugly! Well at least I don’t think I am! Boys just scare me sometimes. I have a best friend named Jolie who lives only a couple miles from my house.
“MALLORY, I TOLD YOU TO WATCH BELLA! SHE JUST TORE A HOLE IN MY NEW SOFA!,”
Uh-oh, that’s my mom, oh and another thing I forgot to mention is that I forget things easily. Got to run. Oh, and before I go, if you thought things would go somewhat smoothly this year, you couldn’t be more wrong.
I am 14 and that is the first story I have started. I know it probably needs some work and you are a good author, so could you give me some hints and help me out?? just post it with your question.
Will you try to do it as quick as you can?
Thanks!!!!!
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